AinurOlorin
Half-elven
Feb 5 2013, 7:03am
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I liked both, but I think this one could have been made to work much better.
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Mainly by having made the dwarves more dismissive and critical of Bilbo in that moment. They did not seem demeaning enough, frankly. It would have been more fitting for Gandalf to react that way, if more of the dwarves had been clearly heard saying things like, "coming here was a waste of our time," "useless baggage on the road is all this Hobbit will prove to us!" etc. If they had been more contemptuous rather than merely mildly disruptive, it would have worked well. I felt it was necessary because Bilbo was under some very dark influence right then. With the dwarves I was thinking "Come on, Gandalf, don't be mean to the dwarves!" It was just too much. A little echo-y effect would have been better, without the ominous darkness. And I don't think Gandalf is growing and shrinking. It's just how everyone experiences it. "Hear me, hounds of Sauron, Gandalf is here! Fly if you value your foul skins, I will shrivel you from tail to snout if you step within this circle!" "Do not be to eager to deal out death in judgement. Even the very wise cannot see all ends."
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