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Meneldor
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Aug 29 2013, 10:21pm
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Now if he had a pair of Keds I'd be worried. I don't think I've had Keds since I was eight. When I want to cover some distance, I wear Nikes. 4:05 AM, 19 July 2005, sprinting for the finish line after four laps on the 6.5 mile perimeter road at Ali Al Salem Air Base, Kuwait. I started running at midnight when the temperature got down to 100F. Whenever I look at my legs in this picture, I can feel all the knots and cramps in my muscles. That was crazy. I've learned never to say never, but I doubt I'll run another marathon. I'm getting too old for that silliness. In the immortal words of Indiana Jones, "It's not the years, it's the mileage." What was this thread topic again? Pardon the tangents; I often get sidetracked on the internet.
They that go down to the sea in ships, that do business in great waters; These see the works of the Lord, and his wonders in the deep.
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CuriousG
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Aug 29 2013, 11:53pm
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It usually starts with something Tolkien-related
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but rarely ends there.
What was this thread topic again? Pardon the tangents; I often get sidetracked on the internet.
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The Grey Elf
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Aug 30 2013, 1:10am
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Ethel, Daniel, I think we're going to need a bigger monument And different types of poetry, too, just what our monument should have! Thanks, guys, it's fun hearing different voices. Care to grace us with some more? Welcome more children to Middle Earth. Support The S.H.I.R.E. Project!
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Brethil
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Aug 30 2013, 3:21am
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There's a reason we are suckers for "Not all who wander are lost"... //
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Ethel Duath
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Aug 30 2013, 4:14am
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It's a wonderful poem! And a pretty big monument! Fifteen birds up there With fire climbing after them "Can you give a lift?" "With fire climbing after them" My favorite line!
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Aug 30 2013, 10:05am
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~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "I desired dragons with a profound desire"
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Ruxendil_Thoorg
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Aug 30 2013, 11:46am
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Sorry, I realized after posting it that in the second line "Its..." should have an apostrophe, thus "It's...." or better yet, changed to: "'Tis..." in fact I think I'll give it another edit just to tidy up a bit, such as adding some punctuation marks for consistency. When I originally wrote it, it was rather spontaneous, not meant to be, you know, engraved in stone or anything!
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Brethil
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Aug 30 2013, 2:31pm
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Same here Rux - I feel need for editing too! //
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Brethil
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Aug 30 2013, 2:32pm
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Rembrethil
Tol Eressea
Aug 31 2013, 12:33am
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Well I was thinking about how the old Hill might feel so here it goes: The Hill I sit upon a hill and dream That all is not as it does seem Of times of old, when wind blew cold And watchman's fires did gleam The sun rose up above a town Smiling as it looked down The sun awoke, a smallish folk As it shone on the hill's green crown A tree upon the top did grow Shading many that it did know With leaves outspread, it raised its head Above the sea of grass below The hobbits had made their home Deep within the soft, rich loam Since days of yore, tunnels they bore And now into the earthy dome Bag End they called it by name A Baggins lived there with his dame For her he built, this fair hall gilt And soon after, their child came A fine young lad, Bilbo, strong But something about him was wrong No quiet child, not meek nor mild Was he, and chased after Elvish song In time he became master of hall With teas and luncheons, and friends to call He forgot the ways, of childhood days And how he had climbed tree and wall One day a wizard came to the Shire To seek a person to conspire With dwarves thirteen, who had been Driven from home by dragon's ire The peaceful halls rang with song Into the night, dark and long The dwarves made plans, to cross the lands To avenge their hurt and wrong The hobbit borne up in this storm Of wrath and fury, no plans could form Carried away, he could not stay In his home, so nice and warm Adventures he had in store Of wrath and ruin, fire and war The dragon they, set out to slay Would in peace be left no more The Hill wept long for it friend Who would return, it knew not when It empty halls, and silent walls Were dark and deserted for days on end But then the neighbors said "Old Baggins must be dead" They opened the door, to day once more To sell his pillows, sheets and bed But just then on the road A pony appeared, bearing a load Bilbo had come back, and did not lack Tales to tell, or treasure stowed The hill rejoiced once more to receive His master and no longer grieve Empty and alone, with cold hearthstone No longer did he the halls leave As time drew on, another came Into the hill to live, Frodo his name A nephew of, his master loved And much about them was the same A party was soon to take place On the top of the hill's face Bilbo's last birthday, before he went away The sadness it felt none could erase The time had come and Bilbo left The old home was now bereft Of its friend dear, and shed many a tear It's heart in two was cleft It still had one in cared for still Who could its joy fulfill Dear to the heart, a vital part In the life of that lonely hill But the wizard did return And the hill, would him spurn But he entered still, under that hill And came under its frown stern An ancient fear there was told And confirmed as heated gold In letters red, by fire fed The dark tale did unfold In Elder Days the Dark Lord rose And took up arms against his foes The Last Alliance, their defiance With strength,strength to oppose In the battle the Ring was won Cut from his hand,The Ruling One Elendil's sword, the day restored By Isildur the deed was done Frodo then must leave the Hill Its sale, its cup of sorrow did fill Abandoned by all, in the Fall It tears it shed in the nights chill The day came to say goodbye But all it could do was cry It last Friend dear, pursued by fear To destroy evil, he must try For many a month it wept alone Longing for a voice it once had known It's new master, caused the disaster That befell land, water, and stone In the middle of this pain When it seemed that all was rain Frodo returned, an old flame burned To welcome him back to his domain The last Baggins to to live there was he For his hurt was too deep you see The last ship he took, the world forsook And was now but memory
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The Grey Elf
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Aug 31 2013, 1:30am
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WOWEE! For an "attempt," that knocked my socks off, Rem!!
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I can't wait to read it again. Such a great idea and how many stanzas were there? I tip my hat to you (*doffs chapeau*).
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silneldor
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Aug 31 2013, 1:54am
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'He's a caution and no mistake!'\\
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" 'Fair lady Goldberry!' said Frodo at last, feeling his heart move with a joy that he did not understand. He stood as he had at times stood enchanted by fair elven-voices; but the spell that was now laid upon him was different: less keen and lofty was the delight, but deeper and nearer to mortal heart; marvellous and yet not strange." Chapter VII: In the House of Tom Bombadil; FOTR's Faerie contains many things besides elves and fays and besides dwarfs, witches, trolls, giants or dragons; it holds the seas, the sun, the moon, the sky; and the earth, and all things that are one in it: tree and bird, water and stone, wine and bread, and ourselves, mortal men, when we are enchanted." — J.R.R. Tolkien
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Ruxendil_Thoorg
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Aug 31 2013, 3:04am
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The fresh perspective your chose here adds a whole new poignancy to an otherwise familiar tale. The strict meter & rhyme pattern that you followed recalls the poems/songs within the books, which I am sure was done intentionally as a tribute to the Professor's style. You set a high difficulty bar for yourself here and you nailed it. This was masterfully crafted, and beyond that, as someone who enjoys writing within a set structure/ strict pattern, I relate to your effort here on a personal level. Thank you!
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Ethel Duath
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Aug 31 2013, 4:12am
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What a wonderful take on it all, from the standpoint of the hill, you tell the entire story! Yes, yesss, precious, it musst go on the monument!
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Kim
Valinor
Aug 31 2013, 4:20am
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and an original take on the story. I'm not very artistic, so appreciate other's efforts all the more!
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DanielLB
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Aug 31 2013, 7:00am
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If only there was a "like" button! /
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elaen32
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Aug 31 2013, 7:48am
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Loved this perspective and it chimes so well with Tolkien's portrayal of landscape and place as characters in themselves. And of course, the Hill and Bag End have a very happy ending as a beautiful family home and never left lonely again!
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Brethil
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Aug 31 2013, 1:02pm
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Meneldor
Valinor
Aug 31 2013, 4:39pm
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This is something I wrote years ago, thinking of it as a sea shanty or fo'c'sle song; the last part was inspired by an Ann Murray song. I didn't intend it as a Middle Earth song, but I think it could fit a merry crew of Teleri in their white ship. So, without further ado: The sigh o' the wind Green waves heavin' high Salt water sprayin' The gull's lonely cry The flap of a sail As the prow dips 'n' rises A sky full o' stars Sunsets 'n' moonrises White wavecaps a-dancin' Black stormclouds a-risin' The view from the masthead Of far blue horizons The shantyman's song Ringin' o'er the foam The splash o' the anchor As we make berth at home Can you imagine a place in creation Where you really rather would be? I'll give you twelve cities And ransoms of princes and kings And diamond filled caves For a ship on the waves And the joy that it brings
They that go down to the sea in ships, that do business in great waters; These see the works of the Lord, and his wonders in the deep.
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Brethil
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Aug 31 2013, 6:02pm
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Inspired by the good lady Constitution..?
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Love the sea-flavor, especially since the Sailor archetype was so close to JRRT's heart. Great job Meneldor!!!!!
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Brethil
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Aug 31 2013, 6:16pm
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Some small edits Ethel. Just a touch up. Last time I promise.
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(And I changed the title.) Al-Estel A slender stalk of tree - stands dreaming On sloping shale - enfolded, waiting. Seven years of looming, - of clouds and chill. Sounds and senses dim - from seed, the womb of memory Of time and tale - of those that come before: Nimloth and Telperion - names echo, long removed And roots recall a hill - so high and fair. Snow softens now, - and syrup that is blood Flows strong and wonders - if day has come. If sun and ice among - those furrows melting Are sign of life, - of promise for blossom. Dreaming it stands - while glowing orb in the sky Warms waiting land. - Behold a sound, Unknown, nigh it comes. - Foot falls grate here On this land of stone - and dying snow. No eyes to see - yet two stand there. No sight of silver tree, - nor of robes of glowing white; But scent adored there is: - shade of air from Valinor. Hear "Ye! Utuvienyes! - I have found it! Lo!" Gentle grip yet firm - pulls the sapling free From exile, alone - in cold and barren soil. To white walls gleaming - water trickles, roots tingle. Silver trumpets call, - spirits rise. Seasons of peace - roll by and 'round again And children tumble - on the green grass In dapple shade - of seedling from a lonely hill. With limbs stretched far - and open to the light, Who sweetly flowers - and offers silent truth Hope of Men blooms - beneath the sun, eternal.
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Ethel Duath
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Aug 31 2013, 6:46pm
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I think I want to read this all day. :)
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And have somebody paint the scenes!
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The Grey Elf
Grey Havens
Aug 31 2013, 7:30pm
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Meneldor, this is atmospheric yet catchy
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Making it a perfect shanty. Thanks for sharing this!
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The Grey Elf
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Aug 31 2013, 7:37pm
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Brethil, your poem gives Ethel visions
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And me as well, but what strikes me is how aromatic it is. It makes feel like I am inhaling the spring of a new world's birth. I don't know how to describe it without going all poetic myself . Lovely lovely lovely!!
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